Student: Kayla Toohey and Karla Galbo Ladies, you earned full credit on all of the sections (a generally very well written essay), except for the summary of pages 96-132 and the Conclusion. The summary of 96-132 earned 10 out of 20 points, because it needs to be twice as long/twice, twice as detailed, and it needs to use the thinking-process words. Fix this section. Your Conclusion earned half credit: 7 out of 15 points. Considering that two really smart ladies like you wrote this, it should be much more developed and detailed and thoughtful. Write: Three sentences about what the lesson is; three sentences about why this message or lesson is important; three or four sentences in which you predict or imagine how ou might use this lesson in your future life.Overall grade is an 82. Make fixes. Raise this to a 100 before next Friday, the 27th. Borrow copies of the novel, please. Mr. Baskin 1/18/12
Grading Points Rubric for Essential-Question Essay on The River
Introduction Paragraph: Thesis/topic sentence; at least three traits stated; explanation of how the essay will proceed.
Maximum Number of Points: 10 POINTS EARNED:
Traits Paragraph: List the traits; define each trait; provide a brief example from the novel for the trait.
Maximum Number of Points: 15 POINTS EARNED:
Conflict Paragraph: Description of the conflict at the beginning of the novel; description of how the conflict changes; explanation of what is similar to and different between the two conflicts.
Maximum Number of Points: 15 POINTS EARNED:
Fill-in-the-Blanks Paragraphs on the Thinking Process/Problem Solving:
Sixty-seven blanks to use the following thinking-process terms: observe or observation; wonder or reflect or reflection; name or naming or identify or identification; consider alternatives or options or considering; predict or predicting or prediction; choose a solution or make a choice or solve or choose; make a plan or prepare a plan or plan; gather resources;
act or do or perform a solution. Maximum Number of Points: 25 POINTS EARNED
Summary of Paragraphs 97-132 in terms of the Thinking Process
From twenty to forty sentences summarizing what Brian is doing on these pages using the vocabulary of the thinking process. Maximum Number of Points: 20 POINTS EARNED:
Conclusion
Restatement of the message or lesson of the novel; explanation of why this is an important message or lesson to know; description of how the writer of the essay (the student) can specifically use this lesson in his/her life in the future. Maximum Number of Points: 15
Three more points added.
Student: Kayla Toohey and Karla Galbo
Ladies, you earned full credit on all of the sections (a generally very well written essay), except for the summary of pages 96-132 and the Conclusion. The summary of 96-132 earned 10 out of 20 points, because it needs to be twice as long/twice, twice as detailed, and it needs to use the thinking-process words. Fix this section. Your Conclusion earned half credit: 7 out of 15 points. Considering that two really smart ladies like you wrote this, it should be much more developed and detailed and thoughtful. Write: Three sentences about what the lesson is; three sentences about why this message or lesson is important; three or four sentences in which you predict or imagine how ou might use this lesson in your future life. Overall grade is an 82. Make fixes. Raise this to a 100 before next Friday, the 27th. Borrow copies of the novel, please.
Mr. Baskin
1/18/12
Grading Points Rubric for Essential-Question Essay on The River
- Introduction Paragraph: Thesis/topic sentence; at least three traits stated; explanation of how the essay will proceed.
Maximum Number of Points: 10 POINTS EARNED:- Traits Paragraph: List the traits; define each trait; provide a brief example from the novel for the trait.
Maximum Number of Points: 15 POINTS EARNED:- Conflict Paragraph: Description of the conflict at the beginning of the novel; description of how the conflict changes; explanation of what is similar to and different between the two conflicts.
Maximum Number of Points: 15 POINTS EARNED:- Fill-in-the-Blanks Paragraphs on the Thinking Process/Problem Solving:
Sixty-seven blanks to use the following thinking-process terms: observe or observation; wonder or reflect or reflection; name or naming or identify or identification; consider alternatives or options or considering; predict or predicting or prediction; choose a solution or make a choice or solve or choose; make a plan or prepare a plan or plan; gather resources;act or do or perform a solution.
Maximum Number of Points: 25 POINTS EARNED
- Summary of Paragraphs 97-132 in terms of the Thinking Process
From twenty to forty sentences summarizing what Brian is doing on these pages using the vocabulary of the thinking process.Maximum Number of Points: 20 POINTS EARNED:
- Conclusion
Restatement of the message or lesson of the novel; explanation of why this is an important message or lesson to know; description of how the writer of the essay (the student) can specifically use this lesson in his/her life in the future.Maximum Number of Points: 15